A thousand fires!

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Monday, 15-Sep-2008 22:41:35

I saw you there, well sort of anyway.
I may be blind, but it was a gorgeous day.
We met, became friends, said we'd be until the end.
Yet I want to be more than that, much much more.
I want to be your lover in times of joy and war.
My love for you burns like a thousand fires.
My vains contain more than blood, there full of hot passtion and desire.
I long to hold you in my loving arms, stroke your silkened hair.
I want to cover you in kisses everywhere!
I love you, your funny, smart, and sweet.
You are truly the girl of my dreams.

Post 2 by Gracesong (Zone BBS is my Life) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:29:51

Awww...that's so sweet!
Who's this special girl?

Post 3 by alison (my ISP would be out of business if it wasn't for this haven I live at) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:37:54

"I saw you there, well sort of anyway." - Can't say why, but I liked this line.

You said "There full of" should've been "they're."

I like this; good job.

Alison

Post 4 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:40:25

I didn't care about spelling at the time. As far as who it is, I'll tell you if I can trust you. I'm not trying to be mean, but that's just how I feel about it.

Post 5 by alison (my ISP would be out of business if it wasn't for this haven I live at) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:41:25

It's all good, I'm just a spelling freak and tend to point stuff like that out.

Post 6 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:43:40

That's good. Glad you like it.